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Answer & Explanation:there are two files one for the Color-Code Explanation and the other one is the email assignment that has the prof comment and how to fix it email assingment.pdf
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To:
All the employees
Subject:
Vote for the floating holiday schedule
I hope this email finds you all well.
The purpose of this e-mail is to inform and encourage all employees to fulfill their survey which is being
taken by the Human Resources Department to decide whether to continue with the present company-wide
uniform floating holiday system or allowing individual liberty to pick one’s personal floating holiday of
choice.
As you all are aware, since the past five years the company has had a uniform floating holiday system
where a majority vote gets to determine when the whole firm should observe the floating holiday
uniformly. However, it has come to our notice that many of you have expressed a wish to have an
individual floating holiday at one’s convenience and need. For this purpose, the company has designed
another plan for an individual floating holiday system.
We believe that this will help employees be more productive and motivated at work. However, if the day
coincides with another employee’s request for floating holiday, the company reserves the right to deny
the employee with lesser seniority the requested holiday for that day.
In order to ascertain the majority’s stance on the matter, the HR department has called for a companywide vote. For this purpose, we encourage you to take out some time to fill out the attached survey on the
matter and help the company determine which floating holiday schedule is more preferred.
Please remember that the latest day to submit the survey is the 25th of October, 2015. In case of any
queries or questions, feel free to contact me on my email during office hours.
Thank you for your cooperation.
Best Regards,
Khalid Alanazi
HR Department.
Color-Code Explanation
Below each of the color codes are URLs to YouTube videos (individual or in a playlist) that will help you
remember/learn the correct English grammar/mechanics rule(s) to improve weak writing.
Green = Sentence contains an incorrect use of or missing punctuation.
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Independent/Dependent Clauses = http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hNT1D0JoFk8
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Comma Splices and how to fix them = http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=SGqGWMoRJC0
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Comma Splices =
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How to Use Commas Correctly =
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=pOwcovqtkGY&list=PLcjaMbVtfVvGC7ZvGnr-wPpD4hgmT5iC (12 Rules)
Yellow = Sentence contains an incorrect word choice, misspelled, or missing word; or, English
grammar or mechanics is incorrect. Read the sentence out loud to help you find the incorrect word, or
use a dictionary to correct the issue.
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Various Elements of Effective English Grammar and Mechanics Writing =
http://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PLcjaMbVtfVvG-hP9pWR0ylE7tUg-lK03e
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Choosing Strong Verbs = https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0DT-ab53ynA
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Subject-Verb Agreement = https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=yEVhUEq6P1w and
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Pronoun-Antecedent Agreement = https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=q4kv6t_2Mdc
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Dictionary.com
Blue = Sentence structure is awkward because the words do not form a complete sentence, or the
sentence(s) is too wordy (contains extra wording or uses long phrases that contribute to lack of
conciseness). Review the sentence(s) in your document to see which words you can delete, or
whether you can place the ideas into separate sentences.
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Sentence Structure = https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=hGjGlhUT48Y
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Types of Sentence Structure =
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Simple, Compound, and Complex Sentences =
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Active vs. Passive Voice = http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=cOhUmttkt90
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Parallel Sentence Structure = http://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PLcjaMbVtfVvHHjw4kR52_MaYh9qQ0Ca3
1.
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Rap for auditory learners; color-coded for visual learners
Coherent Paragraphs and Transitions =
1. http://www.youtube.com/playlist?list=PLcjaMbVtfVvEyNTqQtenhMyWWIgQeJWwn
2. http://youtu.be/0IFDuhdB2Hk – Provides a clear, detailed explanation of how to write a
paragraph; especially helpful for non-native English speakers
3. http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=s7cE5btpXl8&list=PLcjaMbVtfVvGC7ZvGnrwPpD4hgmT5-iC (Transition info – start to view at the 1 minute point)
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5 Writing Tips to Improve Your Writing Immediately – http://youtu.be/GgkRoYPLhts
Orange = Sentence/Paragraph contains a word/sentence that has nothing to do with the sentence
idea or topic sentence (main idea) of the paragraph, or it contains “deadwood” (words that don’t add
anything to the meaning of your message, are redundant in meaning, and/or are vague).
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Topic sentence = a sentence that identifies the main idea/subject of the specific paragraph (not
the entire paper/essay) that is often the paragraph’s very first sentence.
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URL to OWL’s website on how to write topic sentences and the elements of a paragraph:
https://owl.english.purdue.edu/engagement/2/1/29/
Red = incorrect logic, logic is unclear, or wording doesn’t explain the positive/negative issue
I may edit a few sentences or paragraph to model/demonstrate how the information should be
written clearly, concisely, briefly, and professionally.
Professor comment
Khalid – Thank you for submitting your email. Unfortunately, the email was difficult to
understand, and you forgot to use the two most important requirements for this
assignment:
— providing the proper format for the reader to easily follow the written instructions /
directions you want the reader to do (vote on a policy)
— providing information about the two options in an easy to read format, so the reader
can make an intelligent decision based on the information.
Please re-read Chapter 7 to find the proper format for a letter providing instructions. As
written, your letter would receive an 71/C- grade. You have one week to revise and
resubmit your document.
Also, please see the attached document for an explanation of the color coding I used.
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